I know I'm getting boring, but yes, I loved this. Also. Like every other fic you wrote.
And apart from the things I can't seem to be able to put my finger on saying 'this is why I love this story', there are two things I wanted to mention.
Your 'choreography' works. I mean people move the way they should. I always see a story in my mind and it's very irritating when people turn to their left to talk to someone, when that someone happens to be on their right. Know what I mean? You manage to be consistent even in detail. This sounds obvious and easy to do, but it isn't.
Your dialogue sounds natural. This is the way people talk.
Also (oh, this is a third point...) your PG-13 makes my stomach flutter etc. more than most NC-17 stories do.
And (yeah, fourth point, last one, promissed) I can't tell you how pleased I am that in spite of the fact that you're highly irritated by people who don't seem to be able to distinguish RPS from real life, you don't let that discourage you from writing Dom/Elijah. Go you!
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Date: 2003-06-18 12:50 am (UTC)And apart from the things I can't seem to be able to put my finger on saying 'this is why I love this story', there are two things I wanted to mention.
Your 'choreography' works. I mean people move the way they should. I always see a story in my mind and it's very irritating when people turn to their left to talk to someone, when that someone happens to be on their right. Know what I mean? You manage to be consistent even in detail. This sounds obvious and easy to do, but it isn't.
Your dialogue sounds natural. This is the way people talk.
Also (oh, this is a third point...) your PG-13 makes my stomach flutter etc. more than most NC-17 stories do.
And (yeah, fourth point, last one, promissed) I can't tell you how pleased I am that in spite of the fact that you're highly irritated by people who don't seem to be able to distinguish RPS from real life, you don't let that discourage you from writing Dom/Elijah. Go you!
I hope you don't mind me rec'ing this in my LJ?